Water. By Jackson
I am learning to:
- use punctuation in my writing
- spell words correctly
- write using different types of sentences
- improve my writing
Success Criteria: I can
- start my sentences with a capital letter
- end my sentences with a full stop
- Use !, and ?
- spell my spelling words correctly
- try to write new words using what I know
- write simple and compound sentences
- use different conjunctions
- check my punctuation is in the right place
- highlight my spelling tries and fix some
Every thing in the would need's water. aal of the animals and
all oof the insects, and people. Did you now 70% of your
podey is water. is one of the precious thing's. Water is bluy
and sparkly. some is frozen. watere is written as H20.
I
Water is blue like the say. in the sun it sparkles like jilry . In
on the rocks
storm's it crashis and hot Water blibl and blobls. I can hear
When
hal ston's smaking my windo tring to get in side. Wen it hals
it sonds like 25 posims dansing on my roof. When we tip the
parth water it sonds like gasling. After a ship has crashed
lot's of oil leks out. When you canin ball into a pool it smills
When
like clorin. Water feel's dibaly and all of the tempcha's. when
water is madey it feel's slimy. and yaky. When it splats on my
its
fase. Water tastes like plan and it tasts rfeshing. Soult water
It down
tasts grous. it drips bown my face.
Wow Jackson! Great writing! You have used capital letters and full stops well. You have tried to improve your writing by checking the punctuation and identifying some of your spelling tries.
ReplyDelete"You have used capital letters and full stops and asked a question. Good job, jackson!" said Emma
ReplyDelete"You tried to fix up your mistakes, well done!" said Lily.
"He used highlighter and got some of his spelling right, good job!" said Ethan.
"He tried his best in his writing and made it interesting, great work Jackson!" said Rory.
"You have used some compound sentences well done!" said ben.