Athletics Day.      By Oscar

I am learning to: 

• use punctuation in my writing
• use different types of sentences
• write for an audience

Success Criteria: I can:

• use a capital letter to start each sentence
• use a full stop at the end of each sentence
• use conjunctions
• use simple and compound sentences
• use exciting words
• make my writing interesting

Athleticts day.

On Athleticts day lots of amazing events and we did shot put and discus and 06 meter sprint and 100 meter sprint and I wan all the events esept one. And it was long jamp decayse it was verw windy and I onle one loning ginp Wen it is hot wndy and the trees are bloing dane and it was had to ran So I lost.

On Athletics Day there were lots of amazing events and we did shot put and discus and 60 metre sprints and I won all the events except one.It was long jump because it was very windy and I only had one jump. When it is hot, windy and the trees are blowing down, it is hard to run, so I lost.

A Beach.      By Ava

I am learning to use punctuation in my story.

Success Criteria:

• Start my sentences with capital letters
• End my sentences with full stops
• Put a full stop after one idea
• Put a capital letter after a full stop

I am learning to write a recount

• have an introduction that says who, what, when, where,why and how
• has a body with events written in order
• Has a personal comment

I went to the becha Because it was sune and it was hot we splashed I went to the roka Pool's and. I saw a sure fesa wef My family. It was golden. My DaD and my Mum sate undor the Pahotakawe tre as the levs fole Dawn on fam my sebors and my bruther wor sPLasing in the wavsa it wos wom wotor we wor going UP and Down. It was fun.

I went to the beach because it was sunny and it was hot. We splashed. I went to the rock pools and I saw a starfish with my family. It was golden. My dad and my Mum sat under the Pohutukawa tree as the leaves fell down on them.my sisters and my brother were splashing in the waves. It was warm water. We were going up and down. It was fun