How To Be A Good Dairy Farmer. By Zoe.
I am learning to organise my ideas
Success Criteria:
I can:
- Use my plan to wrie my ideas in order
- Write all my ideas about one thing together
I am learning to write my ideas with some detail.
Success Criteria:
I can:
- Stick to the topic
- Write more than two ideas
- Write some of my ideas with detail
- Use ideas from my plan in my writing.
I am learning to improve my writing.
Success Criteria:
I can:
- Check my writing makes sense.
- Identify my spelling tries and fix some of them
- Check I have used punctuation correctly
- Add more detail to my writing
Title: How to be a good dairy farmer.
1. Wake up. get out of bed.
2. Get dressed.
3. Eat yummy breakfast.
4. Round up the cows.
5. Milk the cows.
6. Hose and scrub the shed.
7. Do chores.
8. Eat a big lunch.
9. Do chores.
10. Milk the cows.
Wow, Zoe!! You have written many ideas on how to be a good dairy farmer. You have written your ideas in order by using your detailed plan.
ReplyDeleteYou have improved your work by adding some detail, identify your spelling tries and fixing some as well as checking your use of punctuation.
Keep up the good writing! It often brings a smile to my face when I read it and see how hard you are trying.
"You have written your ideas in order," said Mackenzie.
ReplyDelete"It is detailed writing about how to be a good dairy farmer," said Hugo.
"You have done a detailed plan. Next time you could add some key words," said Francis.
"You have used lots of exciting words, like scrub, round up, chores," said Jackson.
You have improved your writing by highlighting your spelling tries and used the green work to improve the ideas,"
said Ethan.
"You checked full stops and capital letters,"said Lily.
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