Tuesday, 24 September 2013

 My Weekend.  By Jade.

I am learning to:
  •  write a recount
Success criteria: I caninclude an introduction that tells the reader who, what, when, why, where and how. Include the body with words like first of all, next, and then, before, later on and finally. I write how I felt
  • spell my spelling words 
Success criteria: I can remember how to spell my spelling words and use them in my writing
  • add detail to my writing
Success criteria: I canuse exciting word, sadd adjectivesuse different verbsgive reasons why
  • organise my ideas
Success criteria: I can
use my plan so I write my ideas in orderuse my plan so I write the ideas that go together are togetheruse words likefirst of all, next, after, and then and finally




On the weekend I zoomed with Nina to the amazing park because it is a good place to fly our super kites. She is really fun.
Before I make it fly, I have to see which way the strong wind is blowing and next you unwind the long string and make it fly high in the big, blue sky. 
After that I had a scrumptious picnic, yum!
"Delicious," said Nina.
I felt exhausted and had no more energy. It was the best day ever!
I wonder how Nina feels?

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2 comments:

  1. Anonymous25 September 2013 at 14:33

    "You have added good detail to make it nice," said Francis.

    "You have used lots of exciting words. You did a good job," said Austen.

    "When I read your writing I can picture what you are writing about because you have added detail and exciting words," said Rory.

    "You have used full stops and some commas in the right place. Well done!" said Mack.

    "It is really, really awesome and you have written neatly. You improved your writing by yourself," said James.

    "You have put your ideas in order," said Phoenix.

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  2. Anonymous25 September 2013 at 14:35

    " You have written an introduction, a body and added a personal comment,Jade. I enjoyed reading your story because I could picture it in my head because of the way you described it. I want to go to the park to fly a kite too!" said Mrs Singh." You have spelt your spelling words correctly."

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