Wednesday, 26 June 2013

Fireworks

WALT: Follow the writing rubric
Success Criteria:
- I spell a few of the Essential List words correctly.
- I write the sounds I hear in a word.
I use full stops at the end of my sentences.
- I use capital letters at the start of my sentences.
I write compound sentences with two ideas using a joining word like: and, but, because.
I can write a lot of simple everyday words that I already know.
- I can put my ideas in order.

- I can group my ideas together.
- I have some parts of the description structure.
I use some of the language features for the purpose.
- I have a few simple ideas on the topic.

FIREWORKS

FrieWorks are LittiL BomS that Shot in to the Ski. AnD Blo Up. AnD how thay are byiotfl is littil SParKs Kam from the BoM. the SPaKks kan be Difarint Kalis. they Can be reD oringi Yallo And golD. By Austen

Fireworks are little booms that shoot into the sky and blow up. And how they are beautiful is little sparks came from the boom. The sparks can be different colours. They can be red, orange, yellow and gold.


1 comment:

  1. I can just imagine the fireworks going off, when I read your story.
    Keep working on where to put capital letters

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